Rose: "i was testing dorm security. it sucks." dimitri: "you must be freezing. do you want my coat?" rose: "i'm fine. what are you doing out here? are you testing security too?" dimitri: "i am security. this is my watch." rose: "well, good work. i'm glad i was able to help test your awesome skills." - rose hathaway and dimitri belikov (shadow kiss)
So often with beginning writers, the story that they want to start with is the most important story of their life - my molestation, my this, my horrible drug addiction - they want to tell that most important story, and they don't have the skills to tell it yet, so it ends up becoming a comedy. A powerful story told poorly becomes funny, it just makes people laugh behind their hands.
Good description is a learned skill, one of the prime reasons why you cannot succeed unless you read a lot and write a lot. it’s not just a question of how-to, you see; it’s also a question of how much to. reading will help you answer how much, and only reams of writing will help you with the how. you can learn only by doing.
Five," she said. Her lips and cheeks were flushed, but her gaze was steady. "five?" gabriel echoed blankly. "my rating," she said, and smiled at him. "your skill and technique may, perhaps, require work, but the native talent is certainly there. What you require is practice." "and you are willing to be my tutor?" "i should be very insulted if you chose another," cecily said, and leaned up to kiss him again.